aestar101

Nice break up poem. I see tons of angst and depth. You can just see this person that is thorugh with this bad reationship. It has a feel of uncomfort ...

I liked this but you didn't need to repeat the same stanza. It shows an emotion of a someone that has no self-confidence and hides it. Alot fo grils in ...

I love the rythmn. I yourr poem. Whats with the boldface?this is too sweet of a poem too use boldface. I could see this in a valentine. I love it.

I revised it!!!!!!! I sit there as the choir sings, Waiting for my cousin. As if he could take any longer. I take a moment to be alone, Just to ...

I revised it!!!!!!! I sit there as the choir sings, Waiting for my cousin. As if he could take any longer. I take a moment to be alone, Just to ...

This was great except there was a couple typos. All around good!

I like the depth in the lyrics. This is a good song. I think you could expand more though.

GamesEnd is right. Thats why I have the rhetorical questions. The poem is about someone who has problems and has been hurt a lot in the past and see sees ...

That is so sweet. Love it!

Simply beautiful. Any girl will be lucky to have a boyfriend like you :D.

I liked it. Slightly perverted, but I like the message. I liked the depth the rythmn , and the imagry. I like your poems, they are all excellent.

I like th depth. Great poem!

I like it. If it was ever baysitting during the holiday time I would read it to the kid. this has a sugary feel to it.

Critiques are apreciated.

I like this peice. It was better than your other poem.