adriangarcia

Grammar! It's a no wonder you don't like school! ;) Even though I disagree with your message, it is, at least, presented well with this poem. You teetered the 'angst' ...

This seems more of a monologue made by a Shakespearian actor without Shakespeare's aesthetic. You were trying too hard. You tried alliteration, allusion, etc. but they all seemed to fail ...

It seems your wrote your currently posted poems one after the other, because the style and some of words are unmistakably similar. And, all the problems still exist. You keep ...

This is so similar in terms of style to your other poem that they almost seem the same. Too Angst! I can't find a poem because you've layered the angst ...

I'd like to say this is a good poem. But, I can't. First of all, I am a sucker for repetition. If you've read any of my works, you'd see ...

Tick, Tock, Ring The bell has rung My head is hung It's time to go Will she be there? Will she not? I will never know I sit away from ...

First, you really need to try to use grammar. It is difficult to read without it and makes your poem seemed rushed. Second, I would try, if you are going ...

You live and die You learn to cry Never know whats Around the bend Never know what could cause an untimely end Possibilities are endless Left to us to explore ...

I kick stones as I walk, I choke when I talk, If it didn't hurt ,would punch the wall.

First of all, good luck on the contest! Well deserved! Second of all, I love short, concise poems which this definitely is! Third of all, the personification of the breeze ...

I'm not sure of what to say ... I can't make heads or tails of the poem to be honest. I wan to say this is a good poem, but ...

For it is a burning nightmare to gain a kiss of the immortal, For it is a sinful attraction to love those who lurk in the shadows, For it is ...

Well ... I'm kind of speechless. I'm not sure what to think ... First of all, I was very confused as to what I was reading. For a good while ...

Your skin is soft supple and youthful. You must have been sent upon wings of a dove, For you resemble Aphrodite the Goddess of love. With a hidden talent which ...

First of all, I think religious poems should spare cliches. Especially with a poem like this. Second of all, attempt at using proper grammar! It's very hard to read without ...