Yagaron

I'm sorry to dis appoint you, but Raneer is not the main charachter (although he is a major one. Also, if it make you feel better I will get rid ...

Climbersquirrel: no, I do NOT have to know what it means! Suzanne: No, I don't even know what it means, but it does not matter. all that does matter to ...

This is the prologue of the story an is meant to be all mysterious and stuff, but I will make some changes. Thanks for the help!

Well, it is free verse, but thanks for the tips! I'll try and edit it.

I liked it a lot! However. if you are tho change it (which I agree with Chocoholic on), I think "with someone else" would just flow better. I don't know ...

This is on of the best things I have ever read! I love it! Keep it up! I want to read more!

on the first line, the i should be capitalized. Also, as for your question, I'd say that it was fairly well written.

I really can't critique this because it's self-expression. But I like it and feel the same way, except I'm a boy.

I like it, but it seems kind of random. Is there really any point?

I agree with the message, but it was kind of short. I liked the part about sharpening swords on rocks of pride.

I like it. The part about the net was a little confusing, though.

I liked it, but there seemed to be no real structure. I seemed kind of... all over the place. Perhaps you should try to focus on one point.

It's kind of random... but it does capture the "essence" of fire.

I like it, but... it kind of doesn't make any sense. Maybe it would have more meaning if you made it a little easier to understand.

I can definatly see that set to music. It was very moving. Although, if you work on it a bit, you could make it flow a little better.