Words like Daggers

by Kimberlykat

Published January 3, 2008

Sharpen your swords on
the grey rocks of pride.
Those tongues of yours even go
to scraping the hot asphalt.

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bethanyoverload
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bethanyoverload commented Comment · Jan 5, 2008

i agree very much so with that point of veiw. They way that you conveyed your message was very well.


GoooD Job!

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Kimberlykat
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Kimberlykat commented Comment · Jan 4, 2008

I'll try working on a stretched version.

Loranys Gellantara commented Comment · Jan 4, 2008

This was very short and got the message across. I do think that you could make it longer.

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Yagaron
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Yagaron commented Comment · Jan 3, 2008

I agree with the message, but it was kind of short. I liked the part about sharpening swords on rocks of pride.



That awkward moment when you jump out a window because your friend jumped out a window, then you remember that your other friend can fly.
— Rick Riordan, The Ship of the Dead