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Words like Daggers

by Kimberlykat


Sharpen your swords on
the grey rocks of pride.
Those tongues of yours even go
to scraping the hot asphalt.

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Sat Jan 05, 2008 7:26 am
bethanyoverload says...



i agree very much so with that point of veiw. They way that you conveyed your message was very well.


GoooD Job!




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Fri Jan 04, 2008 2:54 pm
Kimberlykat says...



I'll try working on a stretched version.




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Fri Jan 04, 2008 1:43 am



This was very short and got the message across. I do think that you could make it longer.




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Thu Jan 03, 2008 8:53 pm
Yagaron says...



I agree with the message, but it was kind of short. I liked the part about sharpening swords on rocks of pride.





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