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Wow! This is quite amazing! I really loved it! I hope you do write more! You seem to really enjoy writing! Please oh please keep writing! This was so creative! ...

Hey so one thing I did notice. You are forgetting about all the periods/commas at the end of each line! I know to some, the commas/periods don't matter. They very ...

Wow. I loved this. It was very adorable. I couldn't find anything wrong with it. So good job on that! Please keep writing! It was an amazing piece. And I ...

Okay. So It was like there isn't a single thing wrong with this! Great Job! I really love how you replaced "moving swiftly" with "flitting". It's a really good thing ...

So one thing you should probably fix, is the commas. There are a lot of commas missing. Along with, in poetry, you are suppose to end every sentence with a ...

I know how you feel. Losing a friend is very tough. Trust me, I know the feeling. I lost seven of the closest people I knew. And soon ended up ...

This is good. I liked it. You seem to be really god with this. (I didn't find any mistakes, but I'm only 13 so I probably wouldn't know.) It's pretty ...

Wow. Okay, so I love this. I think this has to be my favorite thing I've read so far. It's so true. And I find this very interesting. Please don't ...

So I did notice that you wrote Butterlies instead of butterflies. Another thing was you have "those smiles" twice. Along with you said "Yeah? And when do you even know ...