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Hello! :D This was funny! I liked it. So, for a bit of my opinion. 1. I agree with Gale, it gets very random. I got kind of lost near ...

Hey there Koala! Ok, first of all, let’s go over the basic rules. Capitalize the title of your work. Change it from “a day in the life of a sk8ing ...

Hello! I'm Y! :D This is very good. You might, however, want to rate it. Anyway, I just went through and nit-picked a little. Here we go! It was summer ...

Nit-pick time! :) Her cackle would light up my day Cackle makes me think of and unfriendly laugh. Why don’t you go with something like “chortle”? Would be ruined for ...

Hello! :D First of all, this is a sad poem, but it wanders a bit, if you know what I mean. Focus more on one subject, and then explore it. ...

Interesting poem. I like the idea of it, and the meaning. One thing, however, is the rhythm. Some parts, (especially the words “Never to be laughed at.”) just don’t sound ...

Hello! Hmm, even though the rhythm is off, it still sounds good. I, like the other, feel you should dwell more on the people. Talk about the disgust on the ...

I’m not that familiar with sonnets, so I don’t know if this is good or bad, but the rhythm was off. Also, sometimes I didn’t quite understand what was happening. ...

Hello! I thought this was a good poem. The rythem was steady, and the ryming didn’t sound forced. The only part I didn’t like was: My neck- wet with sweat ...

Hello! Ok, well personally think that the rhythm is a bit off. Especially this part: Grim Reaper, Grim Reaper If I touch your sheath will I bleed? Grim Reaper, Grim ...

The rhythm is a little off sometimes. However, sense it doesn’t rhyme, it’s easier for you to get away with. Like everyone said, it doesn’t make much sense. Nice title. ...

Review time! Interesting poem. I like the idea of it. Some of it didn’t read write for me, and the rhyme was a little off, but I think that gives ...

My first ever review. Here goes! This was kind of confusing for me. It seemed like the story was all over the place. It had a nice plot, though. I ...