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I really liked this actually. At first, it was kind of... I dunno... awkward, I would say, just a different style. But your last few lines were awesome! Great Job! ...

Thank you soo much for the suggestion Reichieru. I'll break them up right now

I loved this. I have to admit that I liked the Aladdin part no matter how strange it was. Good Job.

I thought it was very good. You really captured and worded your point well. I wish I had some suggestions, but I don't. Keep writing

I liked it a lot. I especially liked your 'Truly Love' part. Beautiful rhyming

I thought this was good. I loved your theme and you worded it very well. I think you could use some rhythm if at all possible to make it flow, ...

Wow, I really loved that. Sometimes I don't really understand your poems, but I understood this one perfectly and I can really relate to it in some ways. Very nice. ...

Wow, I really liked that. I wish I had some crit to help you, but I don't. That was just beautiful. Awesome!

Thank you everyone for your suggestions. When I have more time, I'll edit it

Thanks everyone. I'll try to do those things

This was good. I don't really have any suggestions. It's just... good. I wish I could give you some pointers to work on, but can't think of any

Hm.... this is interseting and I liked your color stanzas and the contrast made between them. Your last two lines were pretty good even though this was quite confusing. This ...

Perhaps italics would set them off well. It's your decision of course, but that is my suggestion.

Thanks Yoshiarmada and Reichieru. Thanks for commenting Thanks, Incandescence. Yes, I tend to make things too long, I agree, I'll take a shot at shortening it soon. I just had ...

Thanks so much for your suggestions! I edited it to them. You two have helped me a lot.