Wolferion

Thanks a lot to all of you =) I deleted one stanza and changed the very last phrase. It should stick to the main theme of the poem and I ...

Thank you Snoink and Elfwriter97 =) The same with the other poem, I'll try to revise this on the weekend with your advices ^^

Yes indeed ^^ You've hit the spot. I had to use a dictionary in order to find rhyming words, because it's kind of difficult for me to pull rhyming words ...

Thanks you guys a lot ^^ Kept me trying to write poetry despite all my self-awareness of how much I'm bad at making it rhyme when I want to put ...

I'm really grateful ^^ Thanks a million, I've finally understood the main mistakes I do without noticing them ( Shamefully, as english is my 3rd language, I've got trouble with ...

That's :ftw: =) I owe you a million, thanks ^^

Thanks a lot to all three of you. I really feel happy I managed to write one of the first poems that actually wasn't bad =) In terms of a ...

Also, "counter-attacking" unpaid volunteers who take time out of their busy lives solely to help you is a little ungrateful. Yea you got that right, now that I've calmed down ...

My apologies, snapped out of control.

Edited ^^ I thought of using a bit script style for dialogues as in chapter 1 it's a lot of dialogues as I hadn't come up with anything else while ...

I'll check that book one time :) I've fixed what was mentioned, except the Kyou appearing all of a sudden ( special reasons, will be explained in the first chapter ...

Thanks a lot for your opinion tRiCk. I've rewritten the prologue, giving a lot of new information, widening the sentences a bit and even scoped a bit at the three ...

Many thanks to the both of you :) I've tried editing the prologue by changing many sentences so they make more sense and aren't that awkward, I believe :D If ...

This piece of work feels pretty odd to be honest. I recommend writing poems in more than two verses a stanza =S I feel really odd reading this, it just ...

The idea of it slowly getting simpler and simpler is a pretty interesting one, I do like the poem and I do not think there's something I could point out. ...