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Urg, I forgot to mention something else: Why did Faith just go along and decide to help the Griffins? Her meeting with Silven and his [nameless] mother was very short ...

-I'm continuing it now- Liquid fire gushed into the cell, hissing on the walls and making the prison grow heavier. The pain was immense. Lva curled around my body and ...

Ok, I agree with Seraph. Alot of music...action...it's all happening too fast. Put yourself in her shoes. Wouldn't you take a while to recover after going through all that? We ...

Shadows mask my dreams No more time to pick teams The warmth that I love Flies off with the last black dove As my mind twirls like a cyclone It ...

:D bigbadbear, I think you have competition for 1rst place! :lol: Hey cat4prowl, can I just call you cat? It's easier that way :) Anyways, I have an idea for ...

Thanks :) I'm going to edit it this weekend, but I definitely can't promise any real improvement. Why, In fact, I just re-read my poem and burst out laughing! But ...

Thanks you guys! I'm going to add and edit soon. -I agree with you ئ twit ئ; after re-reading it, it seemed like they were a bit Sue-ish. But they ...

I agree; Aiden was good. In fact, if I was older I might have thought he was cute :P I also really liked the actor who played Gabriel. I liked ...

Thanks for the critiques! I might make it a little longer by writing what else I did when I was out, so I'll PM you when I add that^^ P.s.- ...

I suppose it is. And now that I think of it...S.M did spend alot of time on Edward and Jacob. Jasper, though, I'm not so sure. I actually think that ...

Thanks :D Yeah you're right; I used 'slow' and 'slowed' alot. I'll just go fix that...

It's pretty smooth, Gwen. But, I think the last line of the last stanza is a bit..odd... And instead of saying, 'The wind howls throughout the darkness' I think you ...

I would suggest adding a few rhyming lines, but, maybe tthat's just me. It doesn't exactly flow, but like your other poetry, it is rough and full of feeling. It ...

Not bad; it's rough but full of emotion...beautiful but jagged. Since I'm no poetry expert, I won't be able to give you a good review :oops:

It's 'Check' I looked at your poem already.