Wind

Thank you! I shall go and review some of your work Kim!

i like it, it is short but discriptive. and the impulse ones are always the best.
great job.

kim

I think it was good. I certainly don't think you suck at poetry. I would also like to see what else yoyu write. I'd like to something else with just a little bit more length. It'd be interesting to see your specific talents as a poet. I'm a little more biased towards the poets, so when you write some more, PM me. I'd love to read your stuff.

It's pretty smooth, Gwen.
But, I think the last line of the last stanza is a bit..odd...
And instead of saying, 'The wind howls throughout the darkness' I think you should say 'The wind howls through the darkness'.
Anyways, good job!

The use of simple phrases is great. The last line is a bit stiff though.
It's awesomely elegant, though.

yea i think its good. i love poetry. i have a whole notebook and as i continue to write they only get better.

Oh! Thanks

It's the way you rhymed...but it doesnt matter anyways :S

What? The ABC BB kinda mixed me up

You know what? I change my mind. Don't change the last line; change the third line of stanza one. Darkness--do you see how you used Dark already?

I was wrong. I was thinking that the ABC BB didn't go well; but it's fine, on second glance.

I see what you mean...But what more could I say?

I might revise the last line to fit with the rest of the poem. Other than that, yes it works!

Oh! Thank you so much! I thought I sucked at poetry But I guess I don't!
Thank you!

Yes it's short and but It's not retarded...

I actually think it's the proper length, if you wrote it any longer it would not be so perfect.

Paints a nice vivid picture in my mind.
i like it.

-icy