WinnyWriter

Not bad for a first poem. You've taken on a task that I don't see accomplished much in actually writing a rhyming poem. Some of your words are creative. However, ...

Ok, the blank message was an accident. Lol :) This is a deep subject and I like how you've written it. You've delved into a subject that many people are ...

This is beautiful. It definitely evokes a feeling of peace, as well as slight mystery. I love how it shows that time is a small and fleeting thing, lost when ...

Hey! Nice story. It keeps the reader in the suspense of the question, "Why did Pawpaw keep all this change?" I like how you show in the end that the ...

This is a fascinating work. I like how you've expressed your wandering thoughts, your candid hopes and fears. You've shown how hope and fear, love and hurt can be so ...

Cool how you just put random ramblings down as a poem. However, I wouldn't get too comfortable with that if I were you. Just because it was successful once doesn't ...

This is a nice, simple work that shows one of the pleasures of everyday life. I like how it presents the very actions of the cat as endearing. Definitely will ...

This is amazing and so human! If we can't all relate to this in some area, at some point, then we probably aren't even real. ;) jk I like how ...

Good work. :) The opening is kind of abrupt, so perhaps you could think about how to make it more smooth. Set the stage before throwing in the action. I'm ...

Sorry about the blank message I posted. Anyway, I love the way you picture the concepts here. It gives an aura of mystery, but not so much that it doesn't ...

Nice poem. I kind of like the repetition of the certain words: i.e., past, pain, feelings, peace, laughter, happiness. More colorful adjectives would definitely make it more emotional, but somehow ...

I like some of your ideas here. They correspond well with a quote I saw once that said, "Be yourself. The world will adjust." While following one's heart can sometimes ...

This is a nice story. Not super action-packed, but that's not always bad. I am eager to see where it will go. Hope you're still working away at it. :) ...

This is pretty nice, but is this the end already? I would have liked to see it drawn out a little more. Your idea is cool, though. I also like ...

Historical fiction! Awesome! I admire writers who take on this task. You have used creative imagination. I like how you put a bit of humor in the part where the ...