Hello Alliyah
This is an amazing story. It describes how the person is feeling and how they like to follow the map that's written in front of them and not take there own way. 😁😁
A few things that you could work on though, watch your capitalisation and your punctuation it can get confusing sometimes if you miss a comma, e.g. Come eat, mum- Come eat mum.
Horselover1001
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