Wiggy

Well, it wasn’t so much of a quest as an epic battle. How it all started: Is this how the story actually starts? It seemed kind of rough around the ...

Like gummy said, I've seen better from you. This seemed just like a bunch of sentences slapped together. I really think that you should turn this into a short essay ...

There comes a point when so many people have critted a piece that there really is nothing left to say. Just what everyone else said, especially about the spaces in ...

Wow rebelle-I really liked this poem. It had a majestic quality to it that I didn't expect. Very nicely done! The only part that I have a problem with is ...

Don't worry-I liked it, I really did. Simple language, with depth, is the best for poetry. You've got depth all right, but maybe try simplifying the language, just a bit. ...

First of all, nice job on making the poem flow. It had a rhythmic quality to it, although a few lines could use some work. Slowly I fell for your ...

Hey, nice job! The rhyming scheme jolted me a little, at least with that fifth line added in there, but overall the poem was very well done and flowed very ...

This should definitely be in dramatic poetry, but while it's here I'll put my two cents in. It's a great poem! I really like how you captured the emotion. It ...

First of all, I can definitely tell that you have talent with writing. You have this way of putting sentences together that makes the reader just have to read on. ...

I definitely felt the intensity of the moment, but...didn't get what the poem was about. Normally, a message in a poem speaks through the words, but in this poem it ...

Very, VERY good. It's a beautiful description, and like someone said before, it gave me shivers almost! It plays with the emotions very well, and again I must say you ...

I like how you describe things very well. The first paragraph needs to have some variation in sentences, not just starting with a subject the whole time. What is the ...