Wiggy

Hey, fellow potato lover! lol :D The story's great! I just have one correction: I noticed you said "Ellis" Island. That wasn't around until the late 1800s or early 1900s. ...

I really liked this poem. Was this perhaps inspired by Flowers for Algernon? It's such a sad movie!!!!! You do have great talent, and I'm sure with the suggestons already ...

This was really pretty. (I love your poetry!) But like Snoink said, the title was kinda...not right for the poem. At least I don't get it. :D There was only ...

My sister was Alice in that play this summer!!!!! Talk about coincidence... I've seen the movie, but haven't read the book. I'll prolly have to check it out from the ...

Very nice job gummy! Some words like hydrophioc (sp?) were confusing, but you created a feeling (at least for me) of...disgust (I mean organ walls and roadkill? UGH! ;)) You're ...

save your weeds pretty reflection Needs a comma after "weeds." this skin here is parchment this blood here is ink and what rots is in this Xanthan was right. This ...

Comfy doesn't seem to go with the word chair in this poem. Like it's too...homey while the rest of your poem is angsty/angry type tone. It's just kind of a ...

until the wind ripped the last embryo to desert wilderness, This line comfused me. Other than that, awesome job! I really liked how this poem penetrated into your emotions. You ...

This was beautiful Cassandra. I almost cried when Jimmy died. Somehow I just had a feeling he would. I really liked that part when you did the, "Slap, slap, slap," ...

I've read most of it, DD, but I have to get off now and do some things that I've procrastinated long enough. Ugh. But you did an awesomely awesome job ...

DD *sighs*-I'm stealing your writing talent! *headdesk* It's just not fair how awesome you write! All right, you know how I promised you a crit? Well, if my stupid brain ...

This is like...major awesome. I only have two grammar corrections: Add dash after "ship" and comma after "alone." AFter that, and gummy's suggestion, your good to go. This just had ...

Beautiful, gummy! Here's some suggestions: The nail marks never started at the top - no, we were always halfway when we realized we were falling down, down with nothing to ...

Great job! But I would recommend doing Where it begun instead of Where it had begun And the ending-I really think it needs to rhyme. All about rhythm man. I ...

Very strong poem. But there was one line: with ribbons in her hair and shrapnel in her face are all part of God's plan The second line in this quote ...