Weatherthestorm

A well constructed and interesting plot line. It had just the right touch of morose longing and it was not overcomplicated. I cannot tell you how great that it. Many ...

Keep trying. I did not feel particularly attached to any character nor was the plot anything of real value. You didn't give the fiance a name and I think that ...

I think this piece was well inspired and brilliantly portrayed. I couldn't help but think about Alfred Hitchcock's Rear Window while reading this. The characters of both the "boyish man" ...

You certainly try hard and it shows. This is a rough piece, but it certainly can be great with a little elbow grease and concept work. First, grammar needs to ...

I really don't see this as much of anything at all. Rather than being crafted verse, it seems that you were angry with some person or some people and then ...

Let me start off by saying that I like your style and I'm avidly reading your pieces to try and get a better picture of the author behind the words. ...

BRILLIANT! I thought this was an extraordinary piece. You tried something new. You broke out of the chains of punctuation and you forced the reader to think and wonder and ...

What a beautiful poem. Such beautiful sentiments you have assembled here. The whole poem is a tad rough, but the content is great, so it doesn't matter too much. You ...

I think the poem works in it's own little way. The last line could be used to explain why the love is not working. That last little ryhme does not ...

I'm not going to lie or sugar-coat anything: This needs work. The listing gimmick works for only so much. If you were to use the question list method, you'd need ...

Pish-posh. Let them say what they will. I applaud this piece! You run right into it with such strong convictions and you deliver! Such a bitter and passionate voice, I ...

I'm not sure how much songs differ from poetry, apart from that songs have more metrical things and generally a tune, so I'm going treat mostly as a poem. I ...

Much can be gained from editing. I tend to gravitate towards poetry and therefore, get a little more harsh when it comes to the art of verse. (I don't claim ...

I think that character development is one of the greatest challenges that writer's can face. Fiction is always harder to write for two reasons. The first being that it hasn't ...

The imagery is great. Sorry it's been awhile since I've been critiquing, but I'm back now. I think we can all agree that the length is a little too short. ...