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Hi Myrr-- I think the biggest issue with this is that there is no punctuation...the second one that there are no capitals (but punctuation is by far more important). Without ...

I fixed the title of your poem. Two things: Don't use all caps as your title and one exclamation point would be sufficient, "!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" is just obnoxi

I like the idea behind this Kim, but it's too flighty really...not enough connecting going on. I start the journey through the grass, Smell flowers and dampness as I go, ...

This a "I'm bored" kind of way. It's really rather pointlessl there is no statement made here. But, I suppose I'll critique it as much as I can anyway... Sun ...

The biggest issue (and by biggest I mean it distracting from anything else the poem could possibly hold in it) is that fact that there is no punctuation at all! ...

Hi Cathy-- My biggest problem with this piece is as follows. Read it like this right quick: Is there a reason I am here? What makes me a human, a ...

Hi NS-- Welcome to YWS! I make one request: please take a look at the Rules & Guides before posting anymore work. We do ask that you critique 2 works ...

I really agree with Cade on this one. It's just a list of things you hate...but there really isn't any "life" to the poem--assuming that makes any sense at all. ...

Hi blacktiger-- I understand what you are getting at on this poem. However, how do I understand it you ask? Because you tell me exactly what is going on in ...

I just fixed your title, second one of yours today. As eye-catching as caps my be please do not use all caps in your title/tagline. Thanks! Now onto the poem... ...

I'll agree to agree with the agreements as well :D It's too...explanitory. For a prolugue you don't want to through out all this information. Basically what that does is it ...

Caged rainbows, moving tirelessly around their reflective prisons. Oddly clean - for prisoners. "Oddly" sounds....odd here. Haha. Maybe something like "unnaturally" would sounds better? Also the hyphe

I have to agree with all above me. There isn't really a point to this? Something needs to happen--why is this person like this? What drove them to it? And ...

Well, I suppose there really isn't much to say about this. As a rule I don't really like poems this short--there isn't enough in them to make them great and ...

I don't know if I like it or not, either. It's like right in the middle where you could like it but you could just as easily hate it? I ...