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Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.07)
I fixed your note and the thing about Willow's question. The uselessness thing was really Willow's opinion slipping into the narration, though it seems I didn't get that across. Thanks!
Dec 30, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.06)
Oh hohohoho! You shall see, Hunter! Also, I am glad to know that all my time spent in Taiwanese night markets has not gone to waste. Thanks!
Dec 30, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.05)
Fixing the typos now... Thanks as always! (Also, you will get your wish on Martin's turning. :) )
Dec 30, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.04)
Willow is easily upset, and it's one of her flaws, really. I feel that all characters need both flaws and strong points. Also, despite the fact that powerful folk are ...
Dec 30, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.03)
Note 1: Oops. I must have forgotten to mention that Mr. Pyus is the only passenger on board. I'll fix that immediately. As for Impression 1... well, you'll just have ...
Dec 30, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.02)
Yay! I did well! By the way, Julie Andrews is a famous movie star who played a lot of singing roles for young women. She's a household name in the ...
Dec 30, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.01)
Ah, I did rename the chapters, yes. They are now arranged by landmark moments in mystery plots. Also, I will fix that note right away. Thanks for pointing it out!
Dec 30, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 1.12)
Pfft, this was like the imagery chapter. Besides, now when I revisit this route, I can just do reminder descriptions. And is starless really a word? I got red squigglies ...
Dec 30, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.11)
Aww, thank you! I'm so glad to hear that someone is keeping up with the story!
Dec 22, 2015 -
Re: Unorthodox Thieves (Chap. 19): Tree Climbing 010
Oh, and also, did you do the 010 on purpose, or is it supposed to be 101?
Dec 20, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.06)
ACK, A TYPO! I shall fix that straight away. Sorry I never got around to those reviews I promised to catch up on this week. I went on another baking ...
Dec 19, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.06)
Yeah, the third-person present throws off some people (myself included), but it gives a sense of "here and now" that I quite like. I'll look over those things you mentioned. ...
Nov 29, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.04)
A weeping willow is an actual plant. Did you combine Moaning Myrtle and that one car-trapping tree? I actually haven't decided on Willow and Drake. It depends on how I ...
Nov 25, 2015 -
Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 2.03)
I thought Rick might see this scene as if he's watching a movie that goes into slow motion, so maybe that's what you're picking up on. Since the characters in ...
Nov 24, 2015 -
Re: Unorthodox Thieves (Chap. 15): Hide-and-Hide
Ugh I promise I am going to get to this review. Tech week is death.
Nov 12, 2015