Venom

Uhm..I really don't know what to say about this. I don't know if that's a good thing or a bad thing. But, anyways, I spotted a few things that sounded ...

Aw! You posted this just for me. How sweet. Anyway, another excellent chapter. I didn't find anything wrong per say, but I did find two things that I wasn't very ...

Wow, KJ, just wow. Your writing belongs on the shelves of bookstores around the world. I enjoy your writing more than Stephenie Meyer's writing. As always, I was not able ...

“Why should I know?” she said, knowing full well where it was. Did you mean to put would instead of should ? In my opinion, it sounds better as would. ...

Khrystal smiled. “Sure, no problem, Mr. Carlson. Could you phone my dad to tell him I’ll back late?” There should be a 'be' in between I'll and back . Khrystal ...

There isn't a word great enough to describe your writing, Ashleylee. When I read it, I didn't see any things that needed to be fixed. But, that is a given ...

But before I tell you this story maybe I should tell you who I am. There should be a comma after story . At least on the outside. I think ...

They came out just as they’d gone in, save his jacket around her thin beautiful shoulders. There should be a comma after thin . I mean I’d have to be ...

It was Christmastime in 1998 for the two-legged animals that lived across the barren fields in the small structures they called houses. There should be a space between Christmas and ...

She’d had more that she could handle already tonight. I believe that should be than . “Enough! You’ve wasted enough time already. Now get out of my way so I ...

A sheet of water crashed down on top of me as my backside hit the firm bed of the stream, another shower of droplets drove into my face as I ...

This story is addicting. I had barely read the first couple of paragraphs and I was already hooked. You are most definitely a gifted writer. As far as mistakes go, ...

I absolutely loved this story. I really liked how they sort of saved each others lives without knowing it. Very interesting. To bad this is just a short story. I ...

This was a very..weird story, no offense. I saw a few things that needed to be fixed, but those have already been pointed out. I'm very glad how you mentioned ...

I really enjoyed this. You had very little mistakes, all of which have been pointed out already. The one thing I did see was this: I kissed back in response ...