Vampirewolf3

Hi guys! well this is my first time posting a story on this account, had to make a new one since I can't get into my old account (phoenix) :[ ...

Yes, I am a very nit-picky editor. And I'm probably wrong. but hey, that's OK. Destruction is bliss Thy destruction is greater than thy hate Spite thee and thou shall ...

Aiden! – Strange, very strange. Curiosity consumed him. Hello, who r u? Seconds passed until more letters snapped on screen. Come to the park at midnight! – He was just ...

I came here to escape this, but everywhere I go I see his face staring back at me. You suddenly shift from "this" to a face. Confusing, eh? I close ...

I didn't like this. It was the typical vampire/slayer story and the blooddrinking and vampire-turning processes were glossed over. It wasn't meaningful and the characters weren't new or different or ...

Just one thing. "You must learn not to feel pity for the weak. Learn this, and you will become stronger. Your opponent will find this weakness, and use it to ...

:cry: It's almost like Poe, except not sadistic and pessimistic enough. Rofl-copter. I like it. It is pretty hard to write a good & different love poem.

her eyes like Thoreau’s meadows; who's Thoreau? Sorry for being a n00l3. :shock: Other than that, it's good. Keep it up!

Though I’d have no trouble destroying this mortal, my gut told me to keep patience. I'm sure you meant: Though I’d have no trouble destroying this mortal, my gut told ...

Hmm...April in summer...that's odd. Or maybe it's just me. I'm not good with time zones, seasons, etc. and what-not. “Autumn, this is really odd behavior when your sister has been ...

Holy cow. That is by far the best story I have ever read. However, the reader needs to feel like everything is more of a coincidence. The plot is good ...

The colonel stretched the tendons of his right hand outward until they could no longer extend. In one swift motion, he balled his hand into a compacted fist, the nails ...

red =revision green =comments The shadows danced in the trees, forced back by the small fire. I like your imagery Ten faces were lit up by the traversing Traversing is ...

I love the story. Especially the part were you realize that the protagonist "cannot die." That's always interesting. Trust me, it is ALWAYS interesting. One thing though, try adding more ...

Not much changes since I last visited, but I did find something. Robin landed sharply on the cobblestone, causing the wound on his side to flare sharply in protest. He ...