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Hello Sakura, ummm well lets see here this piece can be improved, alot, well to me since it doesn't really grab my attention I felt as if it was too ...

*feels like crying* haha I came so late on reading this.....a couple years too late rick I've always loved what you've written and hope that we can talk again someday ...

omg i love the message that you are sending out......that if you think that you're destroying me by doing you're wrong cause i'm stronger now and i'm so much more ...

XD nice poem dude that was awesome.....you started off like saying that you couldn't think of anything to write and in the end it became your poem......excellentness right there man ...

that was a great peice and i think you should've put it into the lyrical poetry section......but i do agree with springrain on the change made to the last section......i ...

XD wow this tottaly reminds me of the 4th of july.....sounds like you really love fireworks and the noises they make......but it can't really be taken seriously as a poem ...

nice work man at making such a soothing lullaby....though the first time i read it i didn't read it as a lullaby (tottaly my bad lol) but the second time ...

WOOOO nice lol......i liked the fact that you chose this topic and its true that we do need to do so much since this world is at stake of dying.....but ...

i liked it but the only this is that it feels like it's supposed to continue on cause it feels like you just dropped it at random....but it's very good ...

This was fun to read and i'm not was like rhythmic lol and was cool and it's true that rainy days are the best :D......i liked it a lot go ...

Erm... right... Okay this really is far too long! There is no puncuation. Worsely it's 'poor me' You except us to feel sorry you murdered your wife or lover? That's ...

Hmm... The lion thing was kind of strange, in my opinion. Also, the repetition of "he's so gorgeous" annoyed me a bit, but what's worse is the cliche of the ...

Jenni I agree with Meep...this is a powerful subject you are working with......but I really liked it.....Also it does sound a lil preachy but it's good.....and the way you expressed ...

I agree with Kion....I can relate to this and if I heard this on the street it would seem a bit ramble-like......but I can feel your hatred through the words ...

Hush little baby, no need to fear. Time to go to sleep while mama-dear is here. Hush little baby, no need to cry Mama-dear is here and always ‘til you… ...