TylynRae

Hello there =] This was really lovely. The only thing I would change is the formatting. The lines are a bit too long, so maybe shorten them up a bit.

This was really good. I liked how you described a soccerball as a beast. I had absolutely no idea what was going on and then BAM! The last line tied ...

The dream scene is really good in this, you sort of forget they were sleeping in the first place =]. At least I think it was a dream... I'm pretty ...

Aww, this one was a bit sad for me when I read it. You're descriptions on the unicorns were really good. Especially when you were saying the value of each ...

WIth this one, I liked the conclusion a lot. It was really suspenseful. The one thing I would do with all of yoru chapters is shorten them a bit, break ...

@snickerdooly, haha, I wrote this without even thinking about format, it just sort of flowed out I guess and I didn't think about the format, so I'll definitely fix that! ...

Very nicely done. I never would have seen this from that song! It was a clever way to look at it, without romance and all. Very nicely done =] You ...

This is really good. I didn't find anything particularly wrong with it. Nice job =]

This was really cute. and the subject material was unique, making it more appealing to readers. Nice descriptions too! The stanzas and the rhythm were nice as well. Nice job ...

I liked this a lot. I think the word choice could have been a bit better, a bit more sophisticated, but overall it was good, most of the time it ...

The second to last stanza was by far the best one, but your rhythm was a bit off and the stanzas were so different and varying that there really aws ...

Oh, how I miss haikus. This was really good. And it was really melancholy feeling. Poor bird =\ Well done!

Hey there =] I only found one mistake I think unable should be enable, but I'm not quite sure. I really liked this though. It was short, sweet, but still ...

@ Deanie, thanks for the comment =] I'm glad you liked it!

@ Alliaaryn, THANK YOU. I was so flustered trying to put breaks and parting chapters that I made stupid mistakes, haha. Thanks for catching that =] @ Hollow, thanks =] ...