How Do I Taste?

Hi Alliaa! ^^ Isha here to review.

First of all, this poem is another one with its ups and its downs. There was one line that I really did like, and I think that I'll start by pointing that out. (Go with the positive first, right?)

I taught him how to love, did I do good?
I took his guard down, are you glad he let you in?

So, I'm going to start by saying what it was that I liked about this so much. The fact that you took a bit of a cliche (in the second line especially), and twisted it around. These two lines were unique, and you made them your own. They were original, they were different, and they were sort of amusing, to be totally honest. xD

On the other hand, there were a lot of lines that lacked this. For example:

Please,
Stay with me
Leave her,
Be mine

Okay, so. There are a few things that I didn't like about this. The first and foremost being how absolutely angst-filled it sounded. Honestly, it sounds extremely whiney, and just a tad desperate. Not only that, but it's extremely cliche. Yeah, obviously your poem is about wanting the guy back... but you can do better than this, I know you can.

A lot of the poem seemed like that to me, though. There was a lot of cliche, and like you said, the first stanza... well it just wasn't that great. You have a good basis, and you definitely have the ability to create a very unique poem. You've proven it with those lines that I pointed out. I want you to try and use whatever method it was that you used there and apply it to the rest of the poem. Look over your word choice, the way you use your phrases, and change whatever you think needs changing. This poem does have quite a bit of potential, but it could use some quite a bit of tweaking.

Hope I helped at least a little bit. xD

Keep Writing,
~~Ish.