Twit

Yes'm. I don't want the girl to be pitiable, and as it's going to be in first person, I hope it won't be. Oh, no, is it too like an ...

As this is just the prologue, it is meant to be rather vague, and this is the only part that is going to be in the present tense. If it ...

I think your ideas are very good. I like Tip and Tap, they're so childish, yet kinda cute. And the dispute about who is older - liked that bit!

Glad you liked it, Myth! 8)

The Tell-Tale Heart by Poe, right? Is that Murders in the Rue Morgue - C.Auguste Dupin, Edgar Allen Poe? I don't get it because I havn't read much of his ...

I don't know any German...well, apart from "hende hoch" "sprechen sie deutch" and "schnell" which I couldn't very well put in. :wink: :roll: And I don't know how to spell ...

Thanx everyone for reading and leaving feedback! Grammer isn't my strong point, spelling isn't either, so thank you for pointing out my errors. :D

Yeah, thanks for doing that. I'm not good at breaking it up, 'cos I can never see where a good break is. And I'm the one who wrote it! How ...

I know nix about the American Civil War, but this is a good story, and the ending was a shock! I'm glad you put that in tho, because things like ...

Weird,that.I've met ( okay,encountered and heard about ) JWs,but they wern't nutters like this at all,just sad,because they're following the wrong path.Maybe this bloke was an odd case.

well,I did mean to repeat was that sort of thing.

A bit confusing...I read it through several times and still didn't quite get it.Maybe that's just me being dense?

The last verse was very good,but if you had varied the first verses it would have been better. Just a little too repetitive,that's all.

This was very thought provoking...the rhyming was good as well.Good! 8)