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Woah, creepy. Wery creepy. But yes, a mare is a female horse and you called them Rupert and Hnery. And does he get on the horse inside the stall? I'm ...

Lol, nice last line. What time is this set in, or is it an alternate one? Why's Regan being chased? I haven't read ny of Guttersnipe, so forgive me if ...

Oooh, break it up. It's real difficult to read like this. Leave a line 'tween each paragraph. Is it really a sport then? Never knew that. It's rather gross, though. ...

Very nice. Nice descriptions. But I don't get some of it. Finally, the eye-catcher. The snare for everyone to fall into, trapped, like she was. Surrounded. The word. She had ...

Pretty nice! :D The repetition of "forgive me" did get a bit too much, though. Maybe you could find another way of saying it, and use it on every other ...

Short but sweet. :D And a good idea. It doesn't really feel like a poem, though, more like one of those little sayings you see on T-shirts and people's signatures.

If I didn't get the last part, it's probably because it was a good poem. :roll: I think I got the first part, and it seemed good. The ryhming was ...

Good, but it was a bit confusing... I think that's me being dense, though. :? :)

Why doesn't she run away? Call Childline? Tell someone? This last week, the day before school had started, her father had come home drunk, and pulled a gun of the ...

It was well written, but the story, as everyone else has said, isn't that great at all. Boy says goodbye to girl. A few tears. "We can't be together." Boo ...

I probally shouldn't say, "Lol, me like" but that's all that comes to mind. :roll: A venomous, thorny vine Clutches victims at the throat, Maybe you should add in that ...

Quite nice. :) Some of the rhyming felt a bit stiff, like the words were only there for the rhyme, like here: Sorry's no cure, so let me go, let ...

Ooh, Bush is bad enough straight. :roll: I had to snicker at this line: “I never told anyone, but my job is to tell ya’ll the truth, and here I ...

Yes, the ending was a tad rushed, but the action in the middle wasn't rushed. Good! I didn't see any grammer mistakes or nothing, so very good! Am I glad ...

I thought it was rather a good beginning, actually. :) Now for grammer and stuff! (*groansigh*) He flipped a switch and saw his mother sitting at the table in a ...