Trident

Hello Pencil2paper, a few things here: Hope is like the stars at night, Burning, burning, burning bright. But hope is like a candle too, Gentle and subdued. I like that ...

Hi methrirr123, I've had a chance to look over your story, and it certainly wasn't what I expected! Some thoughts: I remember enough to tell you what happened, but not ...

Heya Jack, I am half asleep when I remember how he dug his holes in the deep winter to break the ice A bit of a slow start here. In ...

Hi sunshine, I must admit shoes aren't exactly my forte! But I will try to dispense as much advice as I can: Not taking one's self too seriously This piece ...

Interesting. Here we go: - The title doesn't bother me as much; it just kind of conjures this image of all these "lovers" in a kind of flamboyant medieval parade ...

Okay I looked at this before and needed a little time to think about it before posting. And then I started a review and accidentally deleted it so here we ...

Hi AndrewJamesMurray, welcome to YWS and thanks for sharing. I've got a few things to say about this: Firstly, please for the love of God, reformat. Byron the babe This ...

Hi austynpotyok, thanks for the story. Here are a few of my opinions: The doctor gave her the news in the slowest voice possible. It was humble, yet concerned, and ...

Hm, I wasn't sure what to think of this when I first read it. I will try to give you some of my thoughts: I have been in a winter ...

Hi EmmVeePi, I'll just make a few observations here: Death poetry Death poetry is extremely difficult to get right. Why? Because it's done so often. So you really have to ...

Hello, a few things here: -I'm unsure if the statement in parentheses is part of the poem or not. If it is, I don't really see how is has to ...

Hi panda11, another member has addressed your spelling errors, so I won't go through them individually. But I have learned that when someone tells you that they aren't very good ...

Hello inkstainedhands, I have a few thought for you: You're dragging me down the path less traveled When I would rather go and forge my own; I don't want to ...

Hi areeba, welcome to the site. Some of my advice: -"The sun is dropping, it looks tired, The wind is all but gone," --Okay, you have some imagery here, but ...

Hi marivisan, firstly I'd liked to say that pretty much anyone reading your works and taking the time to comment is probably going to be doing it with an open ...