Trident

Hi arianaSarroyo, thanks for the poem. Here are some of my thoughts: It's nice and sentimental, but it is like one of those things that is too sentimental. It doesn't ...

Okay so twice I have written a review for this, but I tried to edit something the first time around and it bugged out on me. I really want to ...

Hi storyisking, nice little piece you have here. Here are some of my thoughts and hopefully they can be of help: “I guess the truth is that most of us ...

Hi HHemayed, thanks for the story. Here are my thoughts on how to improve it: I would start by getting rid of most of the beginning part about the family ...

Hi Phoenixbird101, my thoughts on your poem: I suppose I have many of the same thoughts that Kafka has here. The poem really lacks the strong physical imagery that could ...

Hello ElJoker, here are some of my thoughts: Blood is running cold in my veins. I don’t know where to go, where to flee. I am running aimlessly in the ...

Hi reason, here are some of my thoughts: it's the burn at the back of my throat a shot glass of something hot -no ice it's my last meal, a ...

Hi again, I liked this as well, but I think there were parts that were weaker here. Specifically the funeral. I lost some of that power that was there before, ...

Hey MUCHO, this is...heavy to say the least. I mean, there is some really great stuff in here. Its postmodern and fun and I love this kind of stuff. I ...

Hi LifeUnknown, although this was written at a vulnerable point in your life, I am going to look at this critically as though you are trying to get it published. ...

Hi PhoenixBird101, here are a few of my thoughts: Time and time again, You come and you go, Minutes are passing, Yet you are still here. Okay, this beginning is ...

Hey Audy, this is some good stuff. It's pretty tight, so there is little to critique here, but I will try my best to be a little bit picky: Those ...

Hi FantasyWriter15, here are a few of my thoughts on your piece: I actually didn't really think that the small beginning section was necessary. It tries to get all philosophical, ...

Hello again, I'm working on the Green Room and your work keeps appearing! Here we go again: Something about this piece is making me revolt over it, but I can't ...