ToritheMonster

This is absolutely lovely. The way it's written gives it an almost eerie, haunting feel. It's really deep and very sad. Amazing work. I'd give it nitpicks, but I honestly ...

To shorten up the line "So please go away and have a diction themed party," You could condense it to "So leave now and have a diction party". That is ...

Very funny! This poem is very clever, and a cute read. My only problem is that at times your lines get a little cramped. You should make sure you have ...

Oh my dear sweet Jesus on high..... this is bloody brilliant. I can't even make edits because it's so.... amazing. You have crazy amounts of talent. Please keep writing poetry- ...

Hey Timmeh! I liked this poem. I'd give you a full review, but I'm tight on time. Your wording is lovely , but your rhyme metre gets messed up in ...

My friends were reading this over mny shoulder and we were confused as to why this would ever be a featured work untill we saw the end- lovely job :D. ...

Hiya, and welcome to the site. I'm Tori, and I'll give you a quick review. Also, just so you know, please try to avoid chatspeak on the site. As we're ...

I have not laughed so hard in a long time.... :D Lovely work, mate. You have real talent with humour. If this was last minute, I'd hate to see how ...

Hey there! 'fraid I don't have time for a very long review, but I can give you a quicky. I really liked this poem! I can absolutely relate to not ...

This is extremely good! I don't really have any edits. This poem really rang true, and it's beautifully written. Why not try turning it into a villanelle? It would be ...

Hey flower! Alright, I'm going to be brutally honest with you, as we're cool, right? I honestly don't think this poem is very good. Now, let me support my point! ...

Wow. Usually emo/suicidal poems are terrible or whiney..... but this was amazing. It hooked me from the start, and I didn't stop reading it. You language and the flow of ...

Hey there! My edits are in red . What you are reading has been written in accordance to the Great War. It has been written so the Ancient History may ...

Hey there! Tori here. Let's get right to it! Plastic smiles, paper hearts My heart is crumpled on the floor The immediate repetition of 'heart' takes away from the potential ...

Iiscrafty, I think the point of this is that he IS dead. He and the baby dies, and somehow the Giver did too. I liked this! I think it tied ...