ToritheMonster

I totally agree with Ben. You strike me as a happy person, mirror your poems to that! Also, fix up your punctuation. You have a couple of commas that should ...

Hai! I totally agree with what Ben said. Fix your punctuation, and you'll have a good base. After that, work on your meter. It was kind of roundabout. Then, add ...

Hey! Well, I think you have a good base here. It's not well written, but it shows the promise of a very good poem if you work on. After you ...

Hey! Well, this wasn't very well written, but the message you put across was nice. The 3rd section of lines? Well, you used fun twice. Your meter was actually kinda ...

Beautiful job! This was awesome, and I really enjoyed reading it. Follow Pen's advice, and this will be absolutely amazing. I think your title is fine, you don't have to ...

Hey! Nice job on this, it was really good. However, I would prefer Alaska doesn't die. There's something cliche about killing off the MC, and you're better than that. Awesome ...

Hi! Okay, I don't know much Filipino, but the gist of this was that the kid was giving a speech for his school? Please don't post in other languages without ...

This was awesome! As the proud owner of the world's sweetest (and probably one of the oldest) kitties, I totally love cat stories. I can't wait to see how this ...

Oh! You're the apple!You might want to clarify that. I was confused. Actually, the whole thing was pretty confusing. You might want to do some re-writing, because It's not all ...

Aw1 This was sweet. You were emotional without really trying to be. My only suggestion? "Juice it up," as i seem to be saying to everyone increasingly often. Add some ...

This was cute, it made me laugh. Good work. This was short but a fun read, especially me with my super short attention span. My only issue was that you ...

I kinda liked this. Kinda. It did seem like you were venting, but hey, that's what you wanted to do, right? Keep working on this one, it has potential, and ...

Heyya. Dreamy here. One nitpick: "We cut at each others throats and watch them bleed." That line just doesn't sound right, I'd get rid of it if I were you. ...

This was.... was sad, creepy, and fairly good. However, take a look at your meter. It's something like: 5,5,6,2,6,8,5,7..... well, it's not smooth to say the least. Work on this! ...

Aw! This was really sad! I'm all teary over here. Although that could be because I'm overtired. I don't know. Really nice work. You have got talent! Just use Nick's ...