Torigirl15

Aww... this was a really sweet story. I enjoyed reading it, and i like the way you began and ended with the "Don't go" phrase. One thing that did confused ...

I love the percy jackson series, and I think this was written exactly like the books. It was almost like I was reading a forgotton chapter! There were a few ...

i like the way you created images of the things that were... chasing? you. i thought it was a pretty good poem that consisted of something that we can relate ...

overall, i thought this story was pretty confusing, and i lost interest half way through. you didn't flucuate your sentaces, and you added commas in places that periods should have ...

i really enjoyed reading this! the first second left off on a cliff hanger,which i enjoyed. and no, i don't think you need to remake the second part, if you ...

okay, i just have to say that because my name is victoria, i totally love this poem. XD i think its pretty amazing, and goes into character perfectly! i guess ...

i don't agree with fire starter here. i think this poems intent is to let you come up with your own images, and your own interpretation of it. painting a ...

maybe needs a little work on flow, but other than that i loved it! it really shows what each person feels, and makes you wonder exactly what went down during ...

i really liked the first paragraph! i love horses, and that's exactly how i feel when a horse i ride goes out of control. one thing though is that you ...

ME GUSTA! a couple parts don't flow as well, but those can be fixed by moving words to the next line, or by changing a couple of your word choices. ...

there were a lot of run ons! also, don't forget, you don't necessarily have to use a period after each thought, try adding some commas in. don't have the character ...

i thought it was pretty good, but i would have just gotton rid of the rhyme scheme because it makes it sound too classic. like some other ppl have said, ...

this was a very choppy poem, and i thought it should have had a little more flow to it. I liked the idea behind it though, and maybe if you ...

you had a decent plot going, but i was confused about what was going on with the whole switch thing. i think you should explain better why everyone thinks isabelle ...

this is a really good story! i enjoyed it, and you should enter it into some type of contest! i was a little confused about what this word was though ...