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Re: Hawkward
It was good, i'm not gonna say, "I need to crow up." LOL but I agree, I cracked up at the ending. Cheesy, cliché, humor just knows how to make ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: The rise of a knight king
I made an extra one lol sorry
Aug 1, 2014 -
Re: Chapter Two - Saved
Nitpick: "Fine,” I reply shortly, pushing my food around on my plate. After that, we ate dinner in silence. Even Eden, who never stops talking this piece was confusing because ...
Jul 30, 2014 -
Re: Second Always Comes Last: Traitor
This is so freaking good with spectacular detailing, this makes me want to read the first chapter. The imagery of the man being ran over by a train and how ...
Jul 24, 2014 -
Re: Silence is Silver, Chapter 18.
HOLDING A WHAT!? The first sentence is alittle confusing instead of saying the grey shirt that lay on a shirt. Maybe say the grey shirt lays over the shoulder. I ...
Jul 23, 2014 -
Re: The Last Breath of Fire, Chapter 7
At first I had no idea what a weapon belt was until I read further, but I like that you explain it to us, without telling us exactly it was ...
Jul 18, 2014 -
Re: The Book Man, Chapter 65 (Revised)
There is no excellent beauty that hath not some strangeness in the proportion! It has this emotional punch between the characters!!!!! AWE! Your vocabulary is on point, I like that ...
Jul 12, 2014 -
Re: Second Always Comes Last: Hoboskultual
HOLLY CRAP, I loved to be spooked! There is no excellent beauty that hath not some strangeness in the proportion! It has this sinister punch! Your vocabulary is on point, ...
Jul 12, 2014 -
Re: Across Worlds - Chapter 13
I like how Akia is very confused through her experiences and I love how the authors characters explain to some people what's going on. Because than we can see the ...
Jun 29, 2014 -
Re: Dream
WOW That was amazing descriptive. It was not only vivid, but it beckoned me and told me. This person has some mad writing skills. I love the way you described ...
Jun 29, 2014 -
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This is fucking awesome, almost an orgasm to the eyes. There was so much humor in this, I bust out laughing a hundred times or so. You have a dirty ...
Jun 29, 2014 -
Re: Wishes For a Nameless Girl
Did she die? question... Very emotional and thoughtful of you. I'm sorry you're scarred, and their was nothing we (USA) did to stop it. But she's remembered now by this ...
Jun 24, 2014 -
Re: To A Certain Jester
I dig the message! Correct me if i'm wrong. But I thought this poem was about..... Even the weak, the doubted people, can be just as good as anyone else. ...
Jun 24, 2014 -
Re: Final Words
It sucks that poetry can bring out the worse in things and sometimes the best. The poem was really depressing and at the same time peaceful. I like how in ...
Jun 24, 2014 -
Re: REDACTED
This part was absolutely has great detailing!! ''She felt the water rush around her body as the boat sunk in to the jaws of the South Pacific Ocean." Pictured it ...
Jun 24, 2014
