Threnody

I disagree with you. You are a wonderful poet. And I liked this poem a lot. It was very powerful and moving. I know that this post is probably just ...

Hmm. Quite interesting. I liked the plot. Though it does need some more info. A prologue would be nice. I need to know more about these people in order to ...

Wonderful. Just amazing. It flowed very well and it doesn't hide too much nor give away too much. It was a perfect beginning to a great story. Tell me when ...

I like it. A lot. I do agree with the punctuation though. But... I added in your commas for you! *yay* It was very blush inducing but nicely written. And ...

I think it was beautifully written. It is mysterious with a haunting air. I do love it. Don't worry what anyone says. I only have one question- They are the ...

Very delicious. I love the plot and the whole problem. It's all wonderful. This is one of the only mistakes I found although I do think that you should format ...

Excellent job with this. The punctuation could be more accurate, but it made your point very well. ignore the blood that floods your breast Perhaps "drowns your breast," or "swamps ...

Fantastic. Just fantastic. I am in shock right now but the darn thing won't let me put am emoticon where I want it. Just a bit of grammatical errors that ...

THAT WAS AWESOME!!!!! :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

My comments/editing are in bold. Prologue: Guns were (I know how you wanted it to sound, but it just reads oddly without the "were.") inked on her hips, short-shorts revealed ...

If I was nice, I'd call this screamo. If I wasn't, I'd call it emo. It's kind of odd having someone singing sweetly and lightly and then someone randomly screaming. ...

My corrections are in bold- He stood by the door, with sweating hands. He entered the room/chamber (chamber sounds more gothic) ?, and fell silent once more. He saw it ...

**a poem that formed itself in my mind..dedicated to my best friend..** **reviews will be appreciated..** ~ your smile greets me warmly revealing happiness when you see me your laughter ...

Life is like a rollercoaster, It has its ups and downs. Friends are like balloons, They are there if you hold on to them, but if you let go they’ll ...

It's short, sorry. I don't know if people will get it or not. I’m holdin’ it down. Writing my timesheet, pen slips off- squealing Smiling in the corridor arms start ...