Theodorable

Hiya! I see that you got your story up. Well, I know that this is your first story ever and I know the first couple of chapters (so i'm at ...

Hey, I have to say that I agree with everyone, it's good but it needs a little bit more in there. When you post a scene you need to tell ...

Awe, it's cute. You did really good on this subject. It's one that anybody can relate to in one way or another. You might want to add some punctuation in ...

Hey, this is really good. What a surprise. JK ;) But, this can turn into a really great story if you keep up the suspence and if the plot stays ...

Awe, it's so sad. I can admit this has happened to me. (a lot) I like a guy, he likes me, but somehow we never get together. Anyway, enough about ...

Oh, my gosh! This is awesome, it had me in tears when I was done reading it. Great job on everyhting and keep it up. I like how you led ...

Hey, this is a really good poem, but my question is whether or not you meant for the second stanza not to rhyme. Thought that put aside, it is a ...

Wow, this was really good. The meanings were out in the open and it was really sweet. I remember cutting out paper dolls and playing with them, but I've never ...

Okay, just a suggestion. Add "away" to the very last line so it rhymes with the one before it. It is a very good poem. It sort of reminds me ...

Wow, all I can say is just.... wow. This is a powerful poem. It is so true and it happens everday, parents need to realize that a child can be ...

That was really cute! It was good too. Though you might want to stay away from repeating the same line as many times as you did. Though in this one ...

The author Maggie Shayne has some good ones out. I have read Prince of Twilight and Twilight Hunger. (Both are really good) I love any book that has to do ...

this one didn't flow very prettily as it should have. try to write it to flow and don't force your rhymes, it makes the poem sound bad. But the subject ...

This was good, but it almost seemed as if you were repeating yourself the whole time. I liked it and everything, but this isn't my favorite that you wrote. You ...

This was very good. There was so little words, but soooo much meaning in every word you wrote. The rhyming was good and you didn't sound as if you were ...