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  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Action / Adventure
    Re: The InterMallium Episode 1

    Your story starts off with an intensity that immediately pulls the reader in. The setting, with its perfect day, creates a lovely contrast with the imminent darkness that unfolds. I ...

    Sep 29, 2024

  • Poetry » Literature, Narrative
    Re: Letters You Will Never Read

    Your poem resonates with such raw emotion and honesty. The way you express your grief and the profound impact of loss is deeply moving. It's clear that you're grappling with ...

    Jul 2, 2024

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure
    Re: ♦ Plague of the Desert - Part 1 ♦

    Hello! I hope you're well. I noticed the tenth chapter of this series in the green room and read a part that piqued my interest. It made me eager to ...

    Jul 2, 2024

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Shadow of the Leviathan: Chapter 1 - "The Hero"

    Wow, this story is so intriguing! I love how you introduced Kazriel Shyshadow, and the name itself is so cool and mysterious. The description of his appearance really paints a ...

    Jun 23, 2024

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Supernatural
    Re: GODSPEED: Chapter 1: The Thrill of the Hunt

    Wow, that story was intense! I really got hooked from the beginning with the sense of being hunted and the vivid description of the monster tearing through the narrator’s flesh. ...

    Jun 23, 2024

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: A Long Descent Into A Short Canyon

    Wow, that poem really resonated with me! I love how it captures a sense of peace and introspection. The imagery of floating in a sea of color and warmth is ...

    Jun 23, 2024

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Narrative
    Re: Twisted Fate

    Wow, that story really touched my heart! I loved how it started with such intense emotion as Kayra stood on the bridge, feeling overwhelmed by guilt and despair. The way ...

    Jun 22, 2024

  • Short Story » Narrative, Fantasy
    Re: Dawnbringer

    Wow, that story was really something! I loved how Auriel, the magical bird with glowing feathers, used her song to fight off the dark demons invading Eldoria. It was so ...

    Jun 22, 2024


  • Wow, what a wild ride! This short story had me hooked from the start. It's narrated by this quirky inner voice of a tabby cat, which is already hilarious. The ...

    Jun 22, 2024

  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Horror
    Re: Elevator, Endless.

    Wow, I gotta say, this story was a wild ride from start to finish! Let me break it down for you. First off, that prologue had me hooked right away. ...

    May 4, 2024

  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic
    Re: Goodbye forever, Never Mine - part I

    Wow this was looong, but i dont regret it. Wow, this is an incredibly intense and emotional story of love, heartbreak, and self-discovery. It's raw and honest, capturing the rollercoaster ...

    Apr 28, 2024

  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Supernatural
    Re: Box Children - Chapter 1

    This story is really intense! It starts with the main character having these creepy nightmares about a shadowy figure, and then things get even scarier when the figure starts showing ...

    Apr 28, 2024

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Dramatic
    Re: The day we met

    This story feels like a peek into a day in the life of Simone and her friends. Simone seems to really enjoy the outdoors and hanging out with her friends, ...

    Apr 28, 2024

  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical
    Re: Fate

    This poem is like a glimpse into someone's thoughts as they look up at the stars. It's simple but really powerful. The way the speaker compares the shine of the ...

    Apr 12, 2024

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: The sun is black on my tongue-

    This poem feels heavy with emotion, like there's something big happening. It talks about how the sun feels black on the speaker's tongue, which is a really vivid way to ...

    Apr 12, 2024


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