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Re: Weaving the Web of Fate (concept and prologue)
Welcome to Europe. An overcrowded, heavily polluted economic powerhouse, and major hub for incoming flows of goods and people from all over the world. Twenty-seven nations, hundreds of cultures, half ...
Sep 5, 2011 -
Re: Don't have a title yet.
Today I need to review so here I go. Over all this is a quality piece of writing, it shall be interesting to see how you develops the stori. Now ...
Jun 19, 2010 -
Re: Choke
Wow, this is arealy emotional poem! It is very good for a first draft especialy when you did it at school. It covers a dark subject but you have given ...
Mar 30, 2010 -
Re: Infected- Chapter 1.
Hi! I like this story line but not so much the writing. You should try again from scratch using all the critique here. Then post you new version! I can't ...
Mar 29, 2010 -
Re: The mind.
Hi Patatopie! Another of your nonsensical poems I see. One big nit pick. What is it about? You didn't portray what you were talking about very well. A part from ...
Mar 29, 2010 -
Re: The one way street.
I like this poem! Your writing is different because it doesn't make sense; it only shows one side of a story. When I found you, I lost myself, I give ...
Mar 29, 2010 -
Re: The crow's call, Part one.
First I'm going to start off by saying I was... disappointed. Seriously. I have read a lot of your work and I don't think this is your best. Maybe you ...
Mar 29, 2010 -
Re: The Raid
Nice work Hippie! Your action scene is tonns better than mine! Then again, my story is set in the present, not in the past. Weird how the bandits managed to ...
Mar 19, 2010 -
Re: Eternity
I realy like this poem; it's very different. I liked the bit where you talked about a hat, most people would just use a ring. But if you live eternally,Then ...
Mar 18, 2010
