ThePhantomPrince

Hey Jenny why didn't you tell me there was another section with knife fighting? Doesn't matter I found it anyway. To start with Iro's thing is all about speed, therefore ...

Let's jump in shall we? You're not wrong, its rough around the edges, but don't worry about that too much I don't believe any writing is perfect the first time. ...

I'm going to go ahead and just write one summary for all three parts if that's ok. Yes I'll admit the flow is a bit choppy, but that's barely what ...

Well that took a turn didn't it? It was very well done though. The beginning was very objective if that makes sense. What is power? Why do I want it? ...

This poem is phenomenal. There's honestly not much for me to say, besides I love it. Your grammar is not a problem, so let's move onto content. Poetry is not ...

Ok let's jump right in, so normally I would not comment on grammar in poetry, because I don't think it is necessary, but since you use it I do think ...

First off I'd like to say, you would be surprised how many kids deal with anxiety these days. Its hard to say that I appreciate the content because living with ...

The imagery that you have created is breath taking. You have painted a picture with words, which I suppose we all try to do, but you have done it well. ...

I went into this expecting it to be dark, but the end still caught me off guard. The rhyme scheme is, intriguing. In the first quartet, I found it a ...

I like to jump right in, so let's start with grammar. First, and foremost you have to capitalize your I's. It's just a little thing that starts to draw away ...

Just a touch on grammar before I move on, capitalize your I's. It gives an amateur look to something, much better than that. No matter what anyone says do not ...

This is the second of your pieces that I have read, and once again you have taken my breath away. I hate to bring up grammar, but the lower case ...

Since this is poetry, I'm not even going to touch on grammar since I believe grammar gets in the way of what you're trying to say, so I'll move straight ...

Hi, I'm just going to jump right in. Your story is very well written, but there are a few grammatical mistakes that I noticed. "Loud noises drew more of the ...

Okay, well to start off, let's discuss what's good about it. First of all all of your lines have between 13 to 15 syllables which gives the entire piece a ...