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I shall bow down to you, that was a really neat poem. I do agree about the streching out the lines, in some parts of the poem the longer lines ...

"Let me die" amen to that. Lately I'v been writing a lot of poems Like that too. The poem doesn't have any big problems but you are living in a ...

Oh this poem moves me so. :D You display the emotion very well, and bring your message across without being too vague. But in stanza 5, are you saying it ...

I like this poem, this is a really neat idea. But I have some issues. First: the rhyme scheme. try and develop for pattern or have none at all. The ...

Tear it to shreds? looks like you have done that yourself this thing is so choppy. :D The choppiness is a unique style that is used in many famous poems ...

I really like this poem, it is very neat and full of that fun suicidal emotion. But the meter drove me a little crazy, there were a few points in ...

I am sorry, but this did not seem like a poem at all. There was no meaning, nothing rhymes, and I love poems that rhyme. :twisted: hehe. But If you ...

That was nice, It might help to avoid using the word cross, that kind of gives it away that it is Jesus. I am not sure off the top of ...

Well, there are a few typos, that some say are grammar errors, but I usually call them typos. Those are easy to see after looking it over once so I ...

I think Rieda is right, it should be longer, it is too short to get your point across. It does not make much sense, more lines, or even stanzas will ...

i Liked that, it was really good. It (let me think of a good way to phrase this) was amazing. It really showed the truth of an eating disorder if ...

I cannot say anything but that was excellent. It had a vary strong meaning, it flowed, and it is own of those meaningful poems that make you go ''huh'' and ...

First to reply yess. K, I loved that, it was amzing in my opinion. It was descriptive, mysterious, and shall I say a little "smexy" if you will. :D I ...

I Liked it, it was very good. I am envious of everyone that posts here, I can not write songs. Not at all. But you did very good. It fits ...

I read it! It might seem strange for a guy to read this but hey... I Like Reading. That was good. That is what girls talk about. (secret revealed) haha. ...