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Re: The Veil - Chapter 14 Part 3
Hello there, megs! Great chapter you have here. I haven't read the previous, but oh well, it's still great! Nitpicks first :) Qui felt fire run scald her veins, and ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: The Book Man, Chapter 87 (Revised)
Hello, there love! Aurora here with a review day review! I've red some of the previous chapters, but not all- or even most- of them :). No grammatical errors/nitpicks to ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 12) Part 1: A Foggy Hundred-Yard Field Goal into the Cradle of Life
Hello, love! Aurora here with a review day review for you! So I've read part of the previous chapter, so I know the general direction of the scene. Nitpicks first! ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Shakespearean Sonnet #7 - The Frost
Hello, love! Aurora here with a review! Alright. Yet I've always buried underneath, "I'm fine." You've got an extra syllable here, and your iambic pentameter is fine (you did an ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 11): The Great Unknown Outlaw
Hello, sweets! Aurora here with a review day review for you! Haven't read the previous chapters, but oh well... I'm sure I'll do a decent job :) Let us begin. ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Removed
Hello, darling! Aurora here with a review day review for you! And... I think I've read some of the chapters... just not many :). Somewhere in the beginning, I think! ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Pokemon Ultimate Evolution Season Two: Episode 23, Flare
Hello! Aurora here for a quick review day review! I haven't read the previous chapters/episodes, but I'm sure I can do a mostly decent job. Alright, nitpicks first. "Don't worry, ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: deleted
On to the next chapter! Nitpicks first: “Bitch, why didn’t you tell me you were ok!” she screamed, then threw herself at me in a hug. Question mark and exclamation ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: deleted
Hello, love! Aurora here with a Review Day review for you! We began the trek after the group of four we had just encountered, going slow so they wouldn’t see ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Camp Enemy Ch.2
Hello, darling! Aurora here for a review day review! Alright, nitpicks first: Ash covered the landscape, withering black roots pushed up from the ground. There should be an 'and' in ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: ...
Aurora here for her one fiftieth review! Can I just mention that these lyrics are awesome? And I mean that in every sense of the word. Well, before I start ...
Sep 23, 2014 -
Re: Evergreen Love
Hello, love. Aurora here with a quick review for you. God, it's been so long since I've been on here. Anyway~ I like this, but you've got a lot of ...
Aug 19, 2014 -
Re: The Good Life - Prologue: This is Not a Game of Russian Roulette
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you! Alright, nitpicks first, and then we'll get to plot and characterization and so on. Luckily, this is a prologue, so ...
Jul 31, 2014 -
Re: The Book Man, Chapter 81 (Revised)
Hello, love. Aurora here with a quick review for you. On a side not, I can honestly say that I am so confused, not because of you, but because I ...
Jul 28, 2014 -
Re: Rabbits' Feet
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you! Alright, let's start. Well, the plot of this is nice, and the description is nice. For a short story, you ...
Jul 28, 2014