TheClosetKidnapper

It's me again, and again I'm here to tell you this is wonderful. Truly. In my opinion, this particular part is better than the one before it and is closer ...

Hi again, KLovelace! I give you all the props for transitioning from third to first person and fantasy to almost realistic as well as you have here. I've tried it ...

Hi, KLovelace! I started reading the first half of part one for this, realized there was a prologue, and stopped a moment to glance over it. When I saw it ...

Hi, LJM368! This is an excellent piece, even if a bit too short as Ignorance has already said. It has a lot of potential and would excel if you were ...

Hi, ClaireAura! This is great, very emotional. My favorite line is "I miss talking to you because when I did I'd watch the world around me in slow motion." I ...

Hi again! Love this, still. I still can't quite get over the level of writing above; but I will set that aside to review. I agree with much of what ...

Hello, lovethelifeulive! Interesting spin. I haven't seen the new Snow White and the Huntsmen, so I can't judge whether it is similar as the reviewer before me did; so I'm ...

Hey, starlinks! Welcome to YWS! I really like this. You add a certain spin to it with the humor, and I can see it going places one day. I especially ...

For the first time in a long time, I don't know what I could possibly say about this piece other than it's amazing. You have wonderful word choice and syntax, ...

Hi, therealme! This is great. You have wonderful diction and craft your sentences together in a nearly eloquent way. I enjoyed reading it. The only thing I have to say ...

Hello there! This is a very interesting piece. It's heavy, but in a way that replaces the depressing aspect of all the characters committing suicide to more of a peaceful ...

Hi, CadhlaRoberts! This is a very interesting idea you have here. At first, it seemed a bit more like an opening to a short story to me, but I really ...

Hi, lyssiekins! I like this. It's reasonably shorter than some, but it's equally as interesting. I do agree with Deanie, though. I don't know what this is about in its ...

Hello, speakerskat! I saw that this had only two reviews and thought you could use one more. One can never have too much constructive criticism, right? ;) First of all, ...

This is interesting. I'll be looking forward to seeing more. Other than what has already been said in the previous review, I have one editing suggestion as well. You set ...