Tenyo

So pretty! The rhythm and alliteration make it almost audible. I love it.

Thanks for the feedback! I was wondering about the colours. My screen has a pretty high colour contrast so the red and blue hues are easier to see, but if ...

I'm glad I could help =D Please do tag me when you finish, I'd love to see how it turns out. For increasing the unreliability of the narrator in a ...

If this is from God does that make critiquing it a heresy?

To be honest... Fight scenes aren't really something I click with, a lot of them irritate me =p I think you just wrote this well so it was easy to ...

I seem to have not checked the date on this before I reviewed. Sorry! =p Lemme know if there's anything recent you want me to review as well XD

Thank you for posting, I enjoyed it! I do the same thing all the time. I'm better at it on short pieces, but whenever I write anything with an inkling ...

I'll give that a try. Thanks! =D

Anytime. Thank you for posting! I'm tempted to try out the same kind of internal-conflict-dialogue thing but I don't think I'll be able to do it as well. Switching viewpoints ...

Tag me if you post the edit? It's a great piece and I'd love to see how you develop it.

You're welcome. Thank you for posting! I enjoyed reading this a lot =]

Thankyou ^__^ Looking at your feedback, I think there were too many things I wanted to put into this, and so got the tone all mixed up throughout the stanzas. ...

Thank you for posting! I genuinely enjoyed reading this. =]

Woah >.< I meant the 'hate speech' question just as an example. You say a lot of things that are compassionate towards the struggles of gay people, so in the ...

Perfect! The changes you've made make it so much better, and now that it carries more authority it should have a bigger impact =]