Tenyo

Hey Rikk! Bubble, bubble, toil and trouble I was riding on the autobus the other day and saw a temporarily displaced citizen digging through the industrial garbage disposal bins. Or ...

Hey Fort! So; where to start... I love this so much for the quirkiness of it. Devilish bays, meeting fairies, seabirds in a desert. I can imagine this father romanticising ...

Hey Ukranian boy Prologues... The title of this is fantastic, that's what drew me in. I was really confused by the rest, though. The thing with a prologue is that ...

Hey Serene! Let's jump straight in, shall we =] The Style I haven't read the previous chapters of this, but I'm putting it on my reading list. I love your ...

Hey Ether! First things first This is quite a professional piece of work. I'm guessing you've been writing for a long time? It looks that way. You've got a lot ...

Hey Silverlock! How is yws treating you? I hope you're finding it alright. Pacing I agree with Goldflame. This really is the kind of story that grabs you by the ...

Hey Hamster! Let's jump straight into the review, shall we! Action Scenes Personally, I suck at writing action scenes. I'm but better at introspection, so I think you and I ...

Hey there Yosra! I like this to the point of frustration. I can see a mash up of some really powerful lines, but also some very weak ones. Verse I ...

I agree with Lauren. The imagery here is very powerful. It's nice timing too! I'm starting to feel a bit lost now that summer is over. I like the idea ...

Firstly, welcome to yws! It's good to see you're already reading other peoples works and posting your own, that's great! Nitpicks... ...have all been pointed out already, so I'll leave ...

Hey Innergy! It's a shame yws ate the formatting on this, but I'll do my best to review it anyway. This is really nice! I don't just mean nice as ...

Hey Chinkstuhhh Just here for a quick review. First things first, get rid of the bold text. If bold text were easier to read then fonts in general would be ...

Hey Andrea! First things first- Steven's opening comment actually made me go wide-eyed. The relationship between these characters is deathly blunt and agonisingly formal. I love it! The chemistry is ...

Opening It would be much better to cut that little opening and instead spend a little more time setting the scene when she opens her eyes. when you first start ...

This is hard to critique because it's so short, but personally I really like it that way. When I read it I had Lilos voice in my head when she ...