TedusCloud

Hi hi, So first things first: you have quite a beautiful sense of phrasing, and the story is quite gripping. However, I think the main problem with the story lies ...

I have to say, this genre of fiction (flash fiction I believe it's called) is a tough one to crack. I suppose the idea is to create poetry in the ...

Well done for your first attempt at poetry! It's not an easy genre to tackle, and you've done quite well. The story of the poem is very sweet and straightforward ...

This is very short - there's nothing much to go by way of reviewing. It's quite "Quenta Silmarillion" (even the mention of the word Arda) so I suggest that you ...

The hallway was damp ; {Semicolon here, not comma} it had been mopped just minutes before I had appeared in the dark corridor. The building was closed for the night, ...

Your review as promised. My mind is reeling so fast right now with confusion and doubt, the only thought I manage to formulate is, “Why ? ” A brilliant opener, ...

This is a very good piece of work. I like the archaic tone you've got going on here. The blank verse helps, the lack of cesura and general flow of ...

Two separate pieces- they're both tiny. I really like the concept for this one, but I feel like it could be a whole lot better. "Fledgling" Fledgling hopes must take ...

I cried. I was all alone again. I didn’t see anything from blackness that embraced me in its cold arms. My sob echoed along the invisible walls. I bit my ...

This will be interesting to review I think - I'm an atheist so beware :P My Lord, may I be faithful with You now?

Dear Lord that made my day :) First of all Merry Xmas :) Secondly this is a pretty well written piece. I like the use of sentence structure, actually I'm ...

This is quite a good piece of writing. It was short, sweet and to the point. Other than a few nitpicks pointed out earlier by other reviewers, I would say ...

Well first off the plot is very enthralling. What I cannot understand is why you called the land Avalon. Is this based on Arthurian legend? Beware of Arthurian names such ...

Let me comment on the plot. It's very mysterious and I'm very intrigued by how it's going to continue. What I would say is that the flow is sometimes jarred ...

Wow. This poem is the stuff greatness is made of. I greatly appreciate the honesty of it. It is raw, it is powerful. I love that you used an epigraph ...