Teardrop

Hi! I'm Tear! First of all, I thought this was really nice nice! It could have used a bit more detail however. I noticed a lot how you made some ...

Hi I'm Tear! One nitpick... He’s a portly old gentleman, simply strolling through the London streets, as if he knows this small piece of the world by heart I thought ...

Hi! I'm Tear! Anyhow, it's very short so there's not a lot to critique but I'll try my best! One day,on a summer evening, there sat a girl. The opening ...

Hi! I'm Teardrop. First of all I thought this was a good start and has a lot of potential. However, it could have used some editing and a lot of ...

Hi! I'm Teardrop! First of all, I thought this was good, yet it still could be improved. I thought that you could have ellaborated a bit more on emotions and ...

Hey, I'm Teardrop! First of all, this was good. I liked it a lot. I haven't read the first chapter, so I'll try and give the best review I can. ...

Hey, I'm Teardrop! First of all, I really loved this. Really nice imagination, and I thought it was well-written as well. I thought that the girl in your story could ...

Hi! I'm Teardrop. Okay, so I read the first chapter beforehand, and I think I reviewed it, but I thought I might point out some stuff on this one too. ...

I really like this! I think a lot of people can relate, and it's really emotional. ^_^ Getting high and feeling low, Cutting deep and breathing shallow, These two lines ...

Hi! I'm Teardrop. First of all, I thought this was an interesting start. The details started out pretty good, but you lost it when you got to the dialogue. Dialogue ...

Hi! I'm Teardrop! First of all, this is really good! Anyway, the one thing I want to say is that it's not nessesary to caritilize the first word of every ...

Hi! I'm Teardrop! First of all, this is kinda bunched together, try spreading it out a bit more! Anyway, I think you really lack emotion and detail. Really put yourself ...

Hi! First of all, I thought this was cute and I loved it! It was amusing and kept me focused on reading! Her parents, they watched her and asked if ...

Hi! So, first of all this is sad, and I think it's pretty good! I think that you could have used a lot more punctuation, expecially at the end of ...

Hi! I'm Teardrop! theyre waiting, watching theres nothing i can do im hopeless, powerless, and you are too you see were all just sitting, waiting around were all looking for ...