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Summer Carding In: I agreed to go to the eat-slow shack... After months and months of avoiding him, I finally plucked up the courage to meet up with “Jamie Thompson—Footie ...

I love those books, and I'll be first in line for the third one. The only problem is that it doesn't seem like Patterson does proper research. Like, in the ...

--Hope he comes home on time. Is she thinking this, or saying it? If she's thinking, put it in italics. He had many favorite types of stores: gas stations, apparel, ...

Wow... this is a lot. I got through about half of it, and I'll probably come back to read the rest later. For future reference, try posting your material in ...

Terribly sorry... I said something here about your rather uninteresting introduction. I didn't know there was a prologue. I'll go back and read that first. But from what I did ...

I thought this was pretty good as an intro, but not as a prologue. It seems better if you'd use this as the first part of chapter 1 rather than ...

Well, I can see some good ideas floating around in here, they just haven't been given a chance to fully develop. But that's why you posted it, right? Ha, lame ...

I thought this was fairly decent, a few grammatical errors that could use some fixing. I'll point them out as I go along. Thoughts of things done earlier that week ...

Very well done, I liked the voice of this piece. I could really feel what the speaker was feeling. Simple and straightforward, yet eloquent. The imagery and the voice are ...

Wow. That was an amazing twist at the end. Nice job. Very nice job. I really have nothing more to say than excellent job. Very deceptive, very cool. You kept ...

Welcome to YWS! Glad to have you here. :D I'm going to warn you straight off the bat that my OCD turns me into a Grammar and Spelling Nazi. Sincerest ...

Do you have a title for your book? Just curious. If there's one major suggestion I have to make, it's to work on your sentence fluency. Some sentences are ill-formed ...

That book is fantastic. At first I thought it was fiction but when I found out it was true, I cried for 15 minutes. If I remember right, I read ...

I apologise in advance if any of this has already been said. In his youth he blossomed, growing greater and greater in wisdom, learning and perceiving reality to depths that ...

I like this. It's a very unique anecdote. I like how you portrayed the animals, like the lion and his family troubles. Just a few grammatical errors and a couple ...