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Re: Lost and Discovered: Prologue part 1
Hi there! Haven't seen you around YWS before! My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D Quick random note: Letters should be in italics to differentiate ...
Feb 27, 2008 -
Re: NN -- Prologue
Heya Wolf! As you requested, as I deliver. ^_^ If you want help with characterization, I wrote an article on it a while back in the Knowledge Base. Check it ...
Feb 27, 2008 -
Re: Therapists, Unhinged Doors and Grandpa's Fedora
Hey Gryphon! How's it hanging? :D It all started the day I realized that I was in love with my therapist. Eurgh. I hate opening lines like this. Unless it ...
Feb 27, 2008 -
Re: Nevermind
Hey hey hey! *waves* =D “I don’t understand why he even keeps the boy here.” The guard said. Quick grammar note -- when there are speech tags like "(character) said," ...
Feb 27, 2008 -
Re: No name yet
Hey there! I don't think I've seen you around YWS before. My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D Chase was working in the fields when ...
Feb 27, 2008 -
Re: Capital Punishment 1/1
*dances* Yay more! This is a great story. :D out running the thoughts of her earlier awakening. "Outrunning" in this context is one word. *reads on* Oh, never mind. But ...
Feb 27, 2008 -
Re: Capital Punishment
Heya! Have I seen you around the site before? If not, my name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today! :D “So?” She said, calmly. The S in ...
Feb 27, 2008 -
Re: Supermarket story - INTRODUCTION - parts yet to be added
Hello there! Welcome to YWS! My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D Here's a quick grammatical note for you -- when "Mum" is being used ...
Feb 26, 2008 -
Re: Assisted Suicide
Lin, I've always thought your abstract writing style was brilliant. ;) This... is one of those pieces. It really sets the mind in motion, which is something I've been looking ...
Feb 26, 2008 -
Re: Let It Bleed: Chapter Two
Chapter Two! :D Yay my mad critting spree. Lol. I hurt all over, every time I swallowed it felt like someone had stuffed a handful of sand down my throat. ...
Feb 26, 2008 -
Re: Let It Bleed: Chapter One
Yo yo yo, Gwen! I said I'd get to the rest of this eventually. ;) They bent fearfully close to me and clawed at my clothing. The placement of the ...
Feb 26, 2008 -
Re: Let It Bleed: (possibly the new beginning)
Hey Gwen! I promised, therefore I deliver! :D *Random note* Is there a reason why there's a new paragraph thing for each line? over her smooth slopping shoulder, Sloping shoulder* ...
Feb 26, 2008 -
Re: A random sence from a story
Hello there! Welcome to YWS! My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. *bows* Holy cow... the first area you need to work on is definitely your ...
Feb 26, 2008 -
Re: The Old Man and the Doll.
Hihihi! Have we met? Meh! I meet so many people I can't keep track. I'm Saint, and I shall be your critiquer today! :D It had been a very long ...
Feb 26, 2008 -
Re: Warhammer 40k New story
Hello there! I haven't seen you around YWS before. My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D That day beamed bright and cold. "The day" would ...
Feb 26, 2008
