TakeThatYouFiend

I know what you mean. My list of sports is -Bumblepuppy (know to you earthlings by the brand name swingball) -and Morris and Clog dancing. Thats it. Anyway I hope ...

Greetings! I am not a fan of structured writing, but I think in this case it was appropriate due to the subtle way this comes across, this helps transfer the ...

Greetings! I hated both the works that this was based off, but this was really good! I really liked the way Holden was so annoyed about being called "old sport" ...

Good morning/evening/afternoon/night! First off l would like to point out what I think to be a minor spelling error. You put "endin" when you meant "ending". Remember to re-read several ...

It was good, but there are still a couple of little hitches in the rhythm that need to be ironed out. I don't like you starting a line with "and ...

Very interesting Mr. Bond. Normally I dislike a lack of punctuation but here I see that their is reasoning; it is so because that helps emphasize the confusion of your ...

Very nice, but there are a couple of snags methinks. Firstly, the rhythm in the last verse is a little off. The second last line sounds wrong, as if it ...

Right, this was great, but I gotta get this bug bear out of my hair. You have rhymed Thousand with Thousand, and this kinda irritated me, sort of breaking up ...

At first I guessed that, from the title, this was going to be one whole metaphor, yet now I see it is a whole lot more subtle than that. The ...

There are some bits here that are rather nice, yet still others bits that I feel that you really could improve on. Like 781228 I think a few features to ...

Hi there! First off, I really admire the formatting, although some may call it basic I think it's pretty nice :-) Secondly, as null says below me, figurative language, would ...

I must say I am glad to find another poet whose portfolio isn't littered with depression and suicide. The punctuation as ever, needs a little work. The ending is again ...

Pretty good, I think punctuation is still an issue, but I won't go on about it. Firstly off, stanzlify it. It isn't any sort of rhythmic problem or anything like ...

Brilliant. I am a Christian Dancer so this worked well on me. First of, I love it's lyricfulness. I heard this piece to the folk tune "Lord of the Dance", ...

This kinda opens up debate on the whole short vs. long poems thing, and you make some good points here. Just a few points, firstly I think you could have ...