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Hi, Kylan. I noticed that you had no critiques, so I wanted to help you a bit. Ok, I want to tell you that this was... absolutely perfect. I absolutely ...

Feeling like you've lost a friend, You sit alone, Waiting for something But your not sure what. Sitting in the darkness, Eyes shut, Only your presence Saves the room from ...

I didn't hear about this in the news, but I guess it would've been heartwrenching. This poem was beautiful. It clearly painted a vivid picture in my mind of what ...

Cool. This is so true. Freaking drugs, haha. I really liked this poem - I figure it's the best on the site that I've read so far. And that's saying ...

I'm afraid I'd have to agree with aetstar. This poem lacked... substance. All it did was tell us about the guy's boring life. How not interesting! Some pointers: ~ Tell ...

Haha. I feel the same way about Algebra 2... I didn't catch anything wrong with this. I really loved the whole Hell thing in there. It made it really funny ...

I really like the flow of this poem. It had a really pronounced beat to it which made it irrististable! Great job. My favorite stanza is the third because well... ...

Haha. I didn't quite understand any of that, partly because I think it's been using YWS people. I really liked it. It was funny. You could use some detail in ...

Black Cat Sachiko, This took me forever to read. I've been sitting at this computer for like twenty minutes... But it was amazing. Your language, your descriptions, they are just ...

Sam, This was a wonderful poem. I loved the whole morale of it. Just brilliant and sweet at the same time. I especially loved the last line. Really good. One ...

I'll admit it: this poem was almost impossible to get through. You need stanzas. Here, let me edit this how I would input those: Imagine you and I go back ...

I like it. I'll give you that. I like it. It's something that I've always pondered about; would I actually sacrifice myself for someone else's? There weren't many grammar issues ...

Hi, Cat4Prowl. I owe you a critique! This is really good. Really short, but really good. I love the whole 'fire' metaphor you threw in there. It's a lot more ...

Hey. I noticed you had no critiques. That's not good! I'm really impressed. There were a few missed commas in some places, but you can catch those later. I've never ...

Wow. This was a fantastic start! I'm already hooked! You have a lot of grammar issues, but you can always fix those when you edit. But for right now, this ...