Young Writers Society

Cool. This is so true. Freaking drugs, haha.

I really liked this poem - I figure it's the best on the site that I've read so far. And that's saying something! I really liked it. The beat was really good and the wording - just congrats!

I really need something constructive to say... um...

I can't. It's just too brilliant.

:Sythe:

Good stuff


Love this bit

The first time, and the last, I said
As I flicked the ashes off the end,
After this, I'm through.

nice job, I thought it was pretty well written. Well done ^_^

Flemzo wrote:My entry for the instructors "On Fire" contest. Inspired by picture #1

Ten Weeks

Ten weeks ago, my hands would be shaking
In anticipation of what I'm about to do.
The cigarette quivering in my mouth
As I bring the flame to the tip.
The initial inhalation of smoke
Throws me into a coughing fit,
But there's something intriguing about it
As I bring it back for a second drag.
The first time, and the last, I said
As I flicked the ashes off the end,
After this, I'm through.

Here I am, ten weeks later.
I've been jonesing for this moment all day.
The familiar smell of smoke fills my nose,
The familiar taste of bitter crud stings my tongue,
And I tell myself, Today, I'm done forever,
While knowing all along that tomorrow
Has a better chance of following through.

It's amazing what a difference ten weeks makes.

Throws me into a coughing fit,

"After this, I'm through."

"Today, I'm done forever"