SwallowedByInsanity

I liked this poem, it had a lot of hidden meaning behind it whether you intended for that or not. the last line is quite as powerful to the reader ...

I am a bloody, blackened, beaten angel With nothing left but tattered wings and a broken halo I love you use of alliteration with 'bloody, blackened, and beaten', but I ...

The idea was interesting, and had potential to be great, but I feel like your words were awkward and the lines didn't quite flow together. I'd advise you to... for ...

For someone who's new at this, you clearly show potential! I love how throughout the poem, though it was short, you were not at all repetitive. My only advice would ...

Like candy floss in my mouth, My youth waters with delight To the sound of yellow trucks Overwhelming sand pits with construction . That part was a bit awkwardly stated. ...

Although it appears to be a quick poem you conjured up in a few minutes, the flow is still incredible. I can't really picture the waves as they are in ...

For someone with writer's block, this poem really wasn't all that horrible. It did not contain any grammatical flaws, and there's nothing I can see that could be changed with ...

Seeing as I was recently broken up with, stuff like this really speaks to me, and I can tell you wrote this from the darkest sectors of your heart, and ...

it's short and confusing and I am very very lost. It's well written, and detailed and the vocabulary usage is wonderful I just... have no idea what's going on in ...

Just as was said in the review above, the lighthearted aspect was an interesting choice, but it definitely did this poem justice. It was eerie and chilling and sent goosebumps ...

I can't even begin to tell you how impressive and poetic and unimaginably amazing this is. I would never in a million years have been creative or talented enough to ...

I really liked this, it really speaks from the heart. The only criticism I have is Are these the stars or your smile? this line in particular didn't really flow ...

I must say, I don't think there's a soul in the universe out there that can't relate to this poem. Wanting that one person that we cannot have. Your poem ...

This is kind of eerie in a way, almost chilling to read. Some of the lyrics are a bit morbid, but I actually enjoyed the song all the same. It's ...

Yes I agree with the person who commented before me about that confusion. But this poem is really beautifully written, it's almost like a song with the way it flows ...