SushiSashimi333

Okay! Here as requested and I hope that this review helps you ^_^ Pro Plot: Your beginning was short leaving lots of mystery making the reader wondering what happened and ...

Hey! Here as requested! I hope I can be of help ^_^ Okay, after reading through your entire essay I must say overall it was quite good. The transitions were ...

I saw your wall post and thought I would take a quick look, but before I realized what I was doing I had already read through the entire thing O_O ...

Hey! I'm so sorry that this took so long, but here I am now ^_^ In your first paragraph I'm a little confused as to why you added "y" after ...

Hey! Here as promised. Hope this review helps! So first might I start off with the fact that you have quite an interesting title. It at first confused me, then ...

Hey! Here as requested, hope I can help ^_^ I liked how you started this with a question. It really sets everything up, it gives an opinion of a well ...

Hey! This is a review in response to your earlier wall post ^_^ Hope I can help! So your writing is really interesting. It follows the plot line where there's ...

Oh my gosh! I am so sorry I totally forgot, but I shall review right away! Intro: This seems a bit abrupt to me. It's interesting that a vase popped ...

Okay, so you asked for plot help and I shall do so. Be aware that I may be bias at some parts, but if you have any specific questions for ...

Okay, so throughout this story what you tend to do is mention new names to the reader. The names are interesting I will give you that, but we don't know ...

When I saw this was up I was like O_O "You never told me!" Then I realized you posted this today, so I'll hop to the review then. Okay, first ...

I must say I liked this chapter just as much, although the random tangent about the books, I'd have to agree with Fiera. It seemed a little... unneeded. Also you ...

This was just beautiful! I love the way that you brought yourself into the story and actually discussed what you were going to do with your story! I have not ...

Okay! Sushi is back to see the edits that have been made. This won't be as in depth as the others, more in list format, but I'll still explain things ...

Hey! Sushi here as requested! First off let me say that your title is very interesting and eye catching! Okay, now onto the body of the story. Sentence Length: From ...