SushiSashimi333

he had fed information to them about there whereabouts. So in this sentence bit you accidentally used the wrong "there". Sorry to be knit picky but thought you might like ...

The way this is set up was kind of confusing. Is this a poem, because it seems to flow like one. I was a little confused as to whether Iz ...

the yellow window curtains This seems a little redundant since curtains normally go on windows anyways. Kinda backs up the flow. The three were sitting on the bed helping their ...

I thought that this was a very sweet poem to write for your friend. Comparing friendship with flower petals gave it a nostalgic sense that makes one sigh out their ...

"The Arrels acted so quickly it was as though the whole thing was a rehearsed act; without a sound they flipped their swords to a ready position and spreading out ...

I thought that most of the poem had this special rhythm to it that really flowed nicely except for the beginning. I think that the beginning was a bit choppy ...

Okay, for a small passage such as this you sure did have a huge impact. It would seem that you killed off what many would have thought was the main ...

Okay, I like how you made this nice and short, as if to give the reader a little break and keep from overwhelming them. You ended this at a good ...

The pacing of this story was done nicely and evenly, not too fast or too slow which makes the readers want to read on. "May your blade be swift and ...

The information given in your prologue was good and told what was needed to be told, but the way it ended seemed almost abrupt. When Preston is reading the letter ...

Wow, the way that this was written is, well, ingenious! The fact that you started each following sentence with the word that ended the before sentence or a word similar ...

I liked the mystery in this, wondering who "I" is and who "you" is. Nice and short is what describes this piece, even the sentences which is good because the ...

I like little short argument like things such as this. One small spelling mistake was that "apon" is spelled upon. First to formatting when one first looks at this it ...

The "seldom used narrow path" reminded me of a poem written by Robert Frost, seemed almost poetic itself. I think that this was pretty well written, the "definition of tall, ...

I like how you ended every stanza with the title of the poem. The style of this poem was very nice, repeating again and again what's happening while you're doing ...